The Test Of A Rose

Silky smooth droplets float to the earth below

A crimson shower begins to flow

Petals fall so gently down

as whispered wishes drift heavenward bound

Starry night and loves sweet wish

Blend together in hopes of a kiss

A petal yes

And a petal no

The last one falls

As I whisper

He loves me more!

Reviews

[roarke]

the first two lines are such rich, visually vibrant metaphors. Roses are soft and fragrant, yet so vividly sharp and striking at the same time.

the last line, I take possibly a different way than most, it hints ever so subtle at a passion, maybe an ego, accented with an exclamation mark...
perhaps an under current of envy? OR after the last petal falls, it's understood the love is still there even though the flower is no more...Just my takes. Beautiful lines Cherrie

[An owl on the moon]

There is a gentle night's beauty confessed here that fills the mind with love and longing... Beauty in the rose and more beauty in her answer...

[cfix]

A petal yes
And a petal no
The last one falls
As I whisper
He loves me more!

Amazing words here,
I really enjoyed this write.
I thought this was wonderful.