All Around Me Is Sinking Sand

feeling hopless, I got the idea from a commerical

Day without rest, night without end.

Heart without pleasure, hope without friend.

I reach to my rock but only find sand.

I reach to the sun for warmth and good measure

but my lips are now cracked,

 with no cup for my plea.

I long for a tear but  I'm dry as can be.

My feet give way

my weight I cannot bear.

For all around me is sinking sand,

all around is sinking sand.

Author's Note

better flow

Reviews

[ba_mcfarlane]

pure and simple, I'm a fool for that...Bravo!

[?]

Oh my goodness...I have been there a time or two...in fact I think I sunk to the bottom one time...but thank God I recieved the breath of life and floated back to the top...Awesome piece Cherrie

[hmm]

I like this write, has a relaxed feel to it,
So very nicely written.

[An owl on the moon]

Your words took me back to a song I knew as a child... about the Solid Rock of protection and the sinking sand all around that would swallow you... What a powerful sense of desperation...

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

I like the longing in this Nana, it's quite different than what I usually read into you. You have the spirit of poetry, anything you touch is like glitter and gold to me.

[Andrew Scorah]

We all feel like this at one time or another, but we have to pull ourselves up and carry on, I loved the flow of this and the imagery it created.

[Gomer LePoet]

Anyone who has never felt like this as some point in their life are either in a coma or incredibly blessed with strength and faith. Unfortunately, I have been neither.

[Ed Hart]

it must be a commercial for one of the antidepressants

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem tells a story about a life falling apart. Each line adding to the sadness and disappointment. No weakness in this poem. Just powerful description leading to a sad ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Staying in our comfort zone does not guarantee that we are safe, it just says we are not truly living, just existing.