Under the Nose

my teenage rebellion lol

Why couldn't I look under my nose

The important cause of my woe

You made me the monster and I believed you

I carved my skin and plucked out my eye to please you

So can you say you love me still

When I'm living, disregarding your will

You can't chain me down, I swear I'll be free

Because I love her and she loves me

Even if she's gone I'll always be in the wrong

At least I know what's been killing me all along

I'll find hope and maybe it'll be in the same place

Right in front of me, or under the nose

Reviews

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Great work, expressing the retrospective viewpoint. Multitudes of personal circumstance may lend themselves to the narrative, making the advice universal. So often we search for something out there, when it was under our nose to begin with. Love this.

[Chidoriflower]

Thank you for such a thoughtful review :) You hit it right on the head

[Akashi]

I think it would have more feeling if you didn't use weird slang. The title kind of turned me off and it took me a while to get it.

[Chidoriflower]

Oh. The title isn't slang, it's an idiom. Thank you for your review ^-^

[Hello, Goodbye]

Solid piece about despondent feelings and the incessant sense of inevitability.

[Chidoriflower]

You hit it right on the head. Thank you for the review :)