Suspension Effect

an idea i had on being in love wit being on a suspension bridge or ur partner drives rlly fast

My heart beats like the pump of the pedal break

The way you move, the way you take a sharp turn

Is this some kind of dream, am I even awake

The feeling of adrenaline, my heart's on a suspension bridge

You've got me swinging on every word, but I have good balance

The look in your eyes gets blood flowing to all my appendages

Sometimes I fear I might fall too hard

The fear is more real now that I know who you are

But there's ropes to hold on to, promises not broken yet

The rain falls down in a light shower

It reminds me of the tears we both littered

But now we're screaming and it's the best thing

I should have driven in the first place

But you insisted and it's so adorable

Nothing that happens will ever erase the smile on my face

Let's drive home, so I can show you the effects

The way you make me feel, the ways you are so good

Let's walk on life until the roads begin to connect

 

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"my heart's on a suspension bridge
You've got me swinging on every word, but I have good balance
The look in your eyes "

[Sami Khalil]

"But there's ropes to hold on to, promises not broken yet

The rain falls down in a light shower
It reminds me of the tears we both littered"

[Tony Jordan]

First of all, awesome idea, unique and a tad kookie.
Secondly, the title is inspired.
The write flows well and the feeling of being on the bridge with wind blowing into the car is well conveyed. The wish to imbue this kind of experience - to let your lover feel what and how the speaker feels speaks volumes about the relationship.
I love the sentiment.
Well done Chidoriflower.
:)

[Chidoriflower]

Thank you so much :) That sounds like a well thought out review, I'm so grateful for it!!

[Reinabana]

Nice! I am interested to see more

[SZHZIA]

Nice writing I love your thought that comes from your heart. Thanks for sharing. Keep it up

Best
Szhzia

[Chidoriflower]

Thank you for your review friend ^-^

[SZHZIA]

was my pleasure and you are welcome :-)