The Beast

It creeps within the mountain-stone

And turns all living flesh to bone

From shadow lake, cold hands of breadth

And dripping fog, the touch of Death.

Reviews

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

I like it. The title instantly made me read it, I would like for you to review my essay title Within A Beast. You might like it. Very nicely written and well done. The first line is killer!

[Erik Daniel]

Wow. Short and powerful! Nicely done!

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thank you!

[Devesh]

You seem to have an affinity towards the darkness in our world. One can feel that you've observed things very closely, but at a distance. I hope that makes sense. This was hauntingly beautiful, thanks for sharing!

[Christyn Jeffries]

It's true. I don't often write cheerful poems or stories. I wonder why that is.

[Devesh]

Some people are naturally tuned into different frequencies than most. Although I don't write many poems like these, I love reading them because the people who do write poetry of this kind are very insightful. From what I can gather, you write so that you can give an outlet to your insights and emotions. Maybe that is why.

[Christyn Jeffries]

Yes. I write about the wrongs I see in my society so that they can be recognized and righted. Also, I usually only write when I get upset about something I see. Maybe that's why my writing is melancholy. You understand me well.

[Devesh]

Maybe because I myself have an affinity towards the melancholy. I always start out like that,emotions of feeling and sadness usually take over in the beginning. The end always turns out to be hopeful though, I don't know why. Whatever the case, you write beautifully, please keep sharing your stuff here. :)

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thank you.

[Devesh]

You're welcome. =)

[A. Amos]

This is deeo dark raw and pure...adore your write..

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thank you.

[A. Amos]

You're welcome

[Chris]

I liked Steven King's The Fog... and It.

[Christyn Jeffries]

I haven't read any of Steven King's books. Maybe I should.

[Chris]

The older ones are riveting - least to me.

[Chris]

Besides Good Beasts are timeless!

[Christyn Jeffries]

I'll look into it.

[Chris]

The Stand was interesting.

[Christyn Jeffries]

I have a library app and just checked it out. Here goes.

[Chris]

congrats... I hope you have splendidly sleepless nights reading through til sunrise!

[Christyn Jeffries]

Ha, sounds fun!

[Chris]

The Fog is a short story. After starting it at night - lights became a necessity for a while. Chuckling here...

[NeiL ArandA]

You have talent with poetry Please pursue it with likewise fashion .

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

I like the brevity and the spookiness of this wonderful dark write...Bravo.......

[Christyn Jeffries]

Thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..................

[Stephen]

Very interesting. I like the brevity of it, the mystery of it. A poem to me should stay short, I get lost in poems that are 14~15 stanzas long. I like it, when do we get to see more?

[Christyn Jeffries]

Oh, thank you! I don't usually write poetry; in this case I wrote this as a piece of song the main character was singing in my novel. Your review encourages me to take a few steps into this new field.

[Stephen]

glad to help

[Sioranth Smith]

Very spooky! This actually reminds me of a short story I read not too long ago on another site. They were using a cave as a metaphor for the character's own guilt and perceived shortcomings, complete with icy lake that tried to drown him, and this poem describes the sense I got from that cave really well. Nice work!

[Christyn Jeffries]

thanks! This and Battle Song were my first attempts at poetry.

[Sioranth Smith]

Poetry can be tricky. Good for you for giving it a go. I hope you'll keep writing more. :)