This Lullaby Version 2

The second version of this lullaby I dont know its so hard to chose which I like best!!

 This Lullaby

This Lullaby I write for you because you love me like so few

With shaky hands I write the words Because you love me this I've heard

"I love you too I love you too" I whisper softly while you sleep

But you don't here me this is true

Why can't i say it right to you?

I've been told must be bold so I can be in your strong hold

But I'm worn down like a fold

I've been left out in the cold

I wish you knew that i write for you

But last time someone knew they didnt stay true

SO here I write until I find the Mite to read you

my lullabys of love

Author's Note

Rhyming is off in some places let me know if you have corrections or better way to write it

Reviews

[bre]

"SO here I write until I find the Mite to read you my lullabys of love" This line is really sweet. I think that the lullaby's you writing should be protected until someone who can appreciate them comes along. I haven't been able to let people (besides the people on here) read my writing, I need to know that they will be handled with care, because they really are my soul. I think when your sure it'll happen.

[SimplyDisastrous]

This is a really sweet and touching write (: Good job!

[deeps]

I wish you knew that i write for you
But last time someone knew they didnt stay true
SO here I write until I find the Mite to read you
my lullabys of love

I love this part, this is wonderful. Very enjoyable read.

[Dutch Jr.]

Another artistic piece from you. Such scenic imagery. Great write.

[KatiePie]

I think I like this version better, but your righ! It's so hard to choose between them, since they're both so amazing.
A few of my ex's wrote me lullabies since I could never sleep at night and I loved it..
I really like this though.
Good work!
-Cathrine