Starry Night

Just a poem that came to mind

As we lay beneath the burning stars I could have sworn we could see to mars.

 .You told me every hope and dream and all the things in between

You took me on a twisted journey

Some Dreams were sweet as honey.

Others were as dark as an unbeating heart

I realize then we're slowly making a start

I Listen to your stories

They paint goosebumps and euphoric smiles across my body

When i shiver from your tales of darkness

You promise me you'll never go back

I trust those words

When i laugh you laugh along with me

When your through I feel like I truly know you 

There is also another thing I know is true

You were made for me

And I was made for you 

Author's Note

This just came to me. Any good?

Reviews

[A]

I loved the story line! I think this poem is absolutely adorable! It brought a smile to my face and I could just picture two people laying in a field of grass, star gazing, getting to know each other, only to fall in love at the end. :) The only thing I would suggest is proof read. You have a lot of grammar errors, not very consistent with your punctuation and a couple times you used "we" instead of "were" and "we're." Other than that this poem was great! :)

[Amber V. Black]

I love this poem. It reminds me of the innocence and friendship in reLtionshipa. It's really adorable and the story line is very good. Keep on writing!

[An owl on the moon]

This is so tenderly expressed, sharing this beautiful moment together, you and your love. You give it that feeling of peace and stillness only a starry night can give...

[Haifa]

It is so lovely so lovely and beautiful. I like it

[deeps]

I think this is wonderful and ever so amazing.
I love the ending it's postive. Very well written.

[SamBug]

This was just so cute. I could picture laying out by the stars with someone and smiling and laughing. It painted a good picture. Amazing!

[Victoria Thornton]

Awww that's cute

[Lydia Blackwell]

nice poem- my fav line is: Others were as dark as an unbeating heart
I realize then we're slowly making a start....

When we reveal our stories we show trust which opens our hearts to receive love. Very nicely done.

[Iota]

Makes me thing of the beginning of love, when you feel all the right things from another, hear all the right things and hope your trust in them wont be wasted. This read like a bed time story, so bravo, very nice.

[IAmFiyah]

That was a nice poem. I really liked how you set it up for the ending