Traveling the Path

Its short... its one of my older ones

Traveling the Path

 

I walked along the broken trail

free of pain

The clean crisp air so frail

rushing through my veins

leaves brown no sign of rain

my heart is open,

and free of pain

Reviews

[PurpleQuartz]

It's a short poem but it speaks so much! Great writing.

[Chyla]

Thank you so much, I think I might extend on it later not sure yet cause I just finished another poem.

[Sharon]

Nice and short but understandable. Great job. I can see a lot of feeling in this. Nicely worded. Great ending!
"The clean crisp air so frail
rushing through my veins
leaves brown no sign of rain
my heart is open,
and free of pain"
A lot of thoughts in such little amounts of words. Wonderful!

[Chyla]

thank you, and yeah sometimes the shortest poems can be the ones that make you think the longest

[Sharon]

Yep! Nicely done!