Second Life

I wish
I had some inspiration
Besides 
postmodern telecommunication
Torrid
Affairs of love and lies
Behind
they sink through perfect eyes
Alone
I try to make the switch
Beyond
Perfect wife and perfect b***h
Awake
nightmares bring horrid
Dreams
Things will be better tomorrow
Maybe.

Reviews

[Ed Rector]

enjoyed the rhyme scheme and the metering in the poem... well done

[Sr.phil]

crazy style, thumbs up! i thought i had seem many styles of writing but this one is a first, beyond the point of way of writing. the words were simple and yet oh so clear and meaningful. that always works. For some reason im glued on " I try to make the switch, Beyond, Perfect wife and perfect b***h" good stuff, this part made me laugh a bit, somewhat comical, dont know if you meant it to be like that, but i luaghed. Overall, i liked the piece, hope to read more later, peace!. good stuff, good things, and good job! the three G's, phil....

[a Messenger]

I enjoyed this piece. I especially like the opening:
"I wish
I had some inspiration
Besides
postmodern telecommunication"
I think telecommunication, in all its varied forms, is a bane to all writers.
Great job.

Jerry

[Tai Chi Italy]

This story teller reminds me far too much, of someone I know who has just been given almost exactly such a chance at second life. It is uncanny. I loved the lines,

I try to make the switch
Beyond
Perfect wife and perfect b***h

lol made me laugh out loud caitlin! Fitting into a normal life can be hard on inspiration, but that is because we have to concentrate on actual living imo. A very intrigueing write for a girl....you switch voice so well.

Smiling at you

Tai