It Can't Go Anywhere [Part 3]

The moon and stars accompany a romantic atmosphere as a loved-up couple pass by. Nearby, a married couple nearby reflect on their deteriorating relationship in comparison.

        

Waves lap at the sand
Making soft splashes...
Stars light the night sky,
Little candles...

Whoops of laughter within earshot fly,
The happiness of two lovers passing by,
And then there's you and I...

I wish you'd hold my hand
As he holds hers...
I want you to love me
The way you used to...

I glance above praying we can rekindle our relationship trust,
Through therapy, hypnotism or even lust,
Too late, our love has all ready bitten the dust.

You look at the happy-go-lucky pair,
Then me...
I can't stand this feeling, your gaze,
The pain...

These past few days you left me to yearn,
The fire you once lit used to smoulder; now burns,
It will never happen – I must learn.

I turn and walk away,
You do not follow...
Our last chance at making this work
Has failed...

This night is over.

 

Author's Note

As you may have noticed, the first two stanzas in each piece link all the poems together. The image it conveys is a significant explanation of the "truth" in love, and what effect it has on others: the newlyweds, the young and the old.

Reviews

[~IlOvEcHrIsToPhErBuRnEt..]

yeah if i read that correctly i know what this means. My boyfriend and I were like that when we first got together and it was like all happy and touchy touch and all that and then all of a sudden like a month ago it stopped. It seemed like he didnt even wanna touch me the way he used to. But thats my understanding of it all.

[R J Askew]

I thought all three titles were the same and was thinking two ways becomes three, where is the joke? But when I opened this one I noticed the headline is different and, yep, we are in crash-landing mode here, sadly. Love gone...now even lust would be a comfort...like the lust/dust/trust troika. Yes it is sad and not easy to go through the emotions. BUT from the readers viewpoint you do a great job in nailing down the various perspectives of the amore with accuracy and candour. Also the three work well together as the emotional distance between 1-3 is great and is underscored by way the parts are stiched closely together by the common lines. Overall neatly conceived and very well executed. Love! Love! Love!

[~angelalala~]

i love this. the entire 3 pieces all linked together. i love the beginning of each piece, the imagery, the romance of the lines "Waves lap at the sand
Making soft splashes...
Stars light the night sky,
Little candles... " i love the imagery of the young couple in love passing them each time. this could be 3 separate couples, but i imagined it as one. in the 1st, they are young, just found each other, madly in love. in the 2nd, they have been together a while, are drunken, still love each other, but its fading ever so slowly away. & then the 3rd. years have passed, time has separated, the love is gone. what a unique intriguing trilogy this is. a beautiful poem of love & loss.