Outcasts
A Book by Viccy Rogers
 There's always been something April's parents haven't told her. Not being allowed to talk to anyone under any circumstances, she struggles through High School. Until Jake comes along...  © 2013 Viccy Rogers
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Please criticise, need to hand this in as a school assignment. Whenever I've used a dash ( - ) it's been copied as an ( " ) so ignore this:)
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The opening page appears very appealing.
I usually travel in the world of poetry.
Still I hope to travel with you in this book.
Wish you good luck.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Thanks, hope you enjoy it:)
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12 Years Ago
You are most welcome,dear writer :)
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Hey, I'm not going to do your homework for you, you know.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Hey, thanks for your insightful review. Considering the homework was to write the novel, I think I'v.. read moreHey, thanks for your insightful review. Considering the homework was to write the novel, I think I've done that on my own, I was just asking for improvements I could make before handing it in. That allowed? But thanks for the heads up anyway:')
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12 Years Ago
I'm a teacher, I'm super-sensitive to this kind of thing. ;)
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12 Years Ago
What kind of criticism do you want the most? Grammar stuff that might not be picked up by Word, or p.. read moreWhat kind of criticism do you want the most? Grammar stuff that might not be picked up by Word, or plot/character/story tightening?
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12 Years Ago
I'm a high school student, and an honest one. And probably more the second one because that's what I.. read moreI'm a high school student, and an honest one. And probably more the second one because that's what I think makes the most difference:)
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12 Years Ago
It always makes me think people are American when they go to 'high schools'.
Soon, it w.. read moreIt always makes me think people are American when they go to 'high schools'.
Soon, it will be all proms, guns, social conservatism and obesity.
*shudders*
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12 Years Ago
Haha, my school isn't as exciting as that.
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12 Years Ago
Obesity is not exciting. I wobble everywhere like a balloon that is super-sensitive to the magnetic .. read moreObesity is not exciting. I wobble everywhere like a balloon that is super-sensitive to the magnetic field of the planet. However, this magnetic field is aligned with cakes, pies, chip shops and leftovers. Without any prompting my hands seek to gorge my mouth, my mouth seeks to fill my stomach, my stomach seeks to press ever harder against the elastic waist of my George-from-Asda sweatpants.
Guns, however, are exciting, which is why they sell them to children!
http://www.independent.co.uk/news/world/americas/young-guns-the-rifles-made-especially-for-children-8601794.html
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12 Years Ago
Just a joke, didn't mean to be offensive to obese people or anything. Though your description was in.. read moreJust a joke, didn't mean to be offensive to obese people or anything. Though your description was interesting!
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12 Years Ago
I'm not actually obese. That's the fun of being a writer (and, also, a liar).
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12 Years Ago
Sounds thrilling;) thanks for the reviews by the way, I'll make some changes tomorrow:)
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