Virgo

A love story

Virgo

I first saw your emerald eyes in the middle of an eclipse

The sun bled over the dusk and dripped on your skin,

Falling align with everything I ever considered to be perfect. 

Entranced with visual stimulants and heavy convulsions, 

We should have stopped and talked about the end of the world. 

Your hair swept through the bashful skyline,

Embarrassed from the over bearing disappointment of loveless people, 

All of them overly demanding and all of then so fickle. 

My unconscious self is saturated by viral indulgence, 

Compassion has been soaked through mitosis 

Easily replicated into carbon copies 

And easily distributed through gritty haze. 

But you're different. 

For some reason I don't feel so afraid when I'm around you

Even when your emerald eyes trickle into a shade of blue

I still invest my immense faith into your piercing aurora. 

I know that we are all going to die soon

The sky is falling and the planet is fading in transcendence. 

But at least now I found somebody to die with.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Peaceworker22]

Beautiful work. :) Nothing wrong here.

[Legolas]

Great poem. I love the love story. One mistake, line 9, then should be them.

[olla]

sometimes I almost catch the subtle whisper of a psychedelic dream..

[Celestial Witch Child]

Amazing. You have writing down to something almost scientific... Great poem.

[Laura Maidah]

I'm tired of the eclipse eye thing. Second stanza kills though. The execution of the last line and fourth to last stanza is just brilliant. Pithily constructed.

[Corset]

standing ovation, the crowd roars, excellent!

[Alessander]

I agree with another review; I enjoyed the diction "mitosis" "fickle" "viral" "carbon copies"...

This "prose" piece actually reminds me of another writer on here - Selene something or other, in theme, content and diction.

editorial note. "Them" not "Then" in the line "so fickle".

[Sam Gregory]

Wow! This has some of the best immagery I've read in awhile tbh, very very poetic. Beautifully penned indeed :) You have a great vocabulary too

[Marie]

Lovely...that part about emerald eyes...and hw they trickled into a shade of blue...
Almost as good to find somebody to die with as to live with...

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

I can never get over what a perfect writer you are. This poem... I am literally at a loss for words. Fantatsic. Another mind blowing poem, my friend.