[ Wholly ]

Fuel & Pollen, part one.

[ Wholly ]

 A crummy mud-splattered couch lies back-broken in the leisure room,

skywalks hang above its head, wholly bracketing the patients into the massless.

Mantra's start to tumble down the clay sprinkled walls, gloominess persists.

 "Wonders begun't , wonder forgot. children scamper through the parking lot",

so forth and so forth, hurled silence rhymes into an embrace. We speak. 

 "Look at the plastic that grows on these trees,  how so

bludgeoned and filthy."

Medical students grasp the indelicacy.

Wayward on. A glimpse of tangency. Forever forgotten by the one who lies on stale pillows,

veins putrid and the television left on.  

     

Author's Note

The first part of my booklet Fuel & Pollen. Finally back from my hiatus. Hope you enjoy

Reviews

[Waelboy]

A very nontraditional way of writing! Very different, and I like it!

[Southern Cross]

You are so unique in all your writes..The imagery was intense and took me back to a time when my Mom was dying..."Forever forgotten by the one who lies on stale pillows,
veins putrid and the television left on. " Hard to think you are only 17 with the eyes of the ancients when you write

[Corset]

I did enjoy very much , your poems are sometimes so raw, growing old or just growing stale is a fear of mine too, but you have a very long time before you look in the mirror and see a parent, or even forget the people who help shape your life, before you should become so wise or so jaded, enjoy youth, every second :) natures green is gold :P

[MOON]

Emotional sad write. Love the imagery and word choice.

[Jordan A. Wilson]

very in depth descriptions. i can dig it.

[Dayran]

A point of perspective that begins very far from the ears of someone we are very careful not to offend. Perhaps we are humble and don't wish to say the wrong thing. Perhaps it is someone we respect and don't wish to lose the experience of respectfulness. Everything about the poem points to something so very delicate in mannerisms.

[Pax]

I just love the ending lines, very much great. Enjoyed it. Hospital meds,beds and a sense of melancholy in the sorroundings. Well done again my friend.

[That_Girl]

"skywalks hang above its head, wholly bracketing the patients into the massless." - love that! Your imagery is so vivid. I can't even begin to comprehend your raw talent. Lovely job!

[afra]

very deep and beautiful ...well done