nice piece of work.
I like the way you keep the readerzoned out till the last paragraph where someone gets to know actually what its all about:-)
good job.
I was kind of hoping for the title to be repeated again at the end....you use such broad vocab and the rythem is finely cut,the final paragraph was especially moving, good work Sir.
I normally hate break-up type poems even more so than bad love poems, but I really like this.
Please everyone read that statement and the rest of this review carefully before responding to that, please.
there's a couple places where I wanted to make a wording suggestion but a voice in my head became quicksand and swallowed me and yelled 'shut up' into the world I could eventually no longer see and hear. There's too f*****g much right with this poem for all that, and even the thought of hypothetical perfection bores me to contrived tears.
The imagery is visually painful like a vw curb feeler against a median when you've already got a migraine and a toothache, while remaining beautiful, like the capturing of the experience through great cinematography
anyone who doesn't know how top shelf a compliment that is needs to go do some more drugs
well done...your latest poem will make more sense now and after I see the film
Beautiful Cole! My interpretation was unconditional love being given, marriage, a life of happiness after bein hurt. Maybe that's just me though...all the same, another great piece from you!
sounds like someone who has been repeatedly hurt by someone he or she truly loves and will always be forgiving. so sad.
Posted 13 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
sad in which form of the definition?..I'm not being sarcastic, I'm genuinely curious as to the conte.. read moresad in which form of the definition?..I'm not being sarcastic, I'm genuinely curious as to the context and intent
12 Years Ago
it's sad that they are being hurt. it's sad that they will always forgive the person who inflicts pa.. read moreit's sad that they are being hurt. it's sad that they will always forgive the person who inflicts pain on them. it's sad because the person being hurt doesn't deserve it. the situation is sad. waiting is sad. it really is a sad poem.
but you don't think the beauty of it outweighs it like a t**d on a scale against a pimple? not that .. read morebut you don't think the beauty of it outweighs it like a t**d on a scale against a pimple? not that it's a contest..just a bad analogy of sorts
12 Years Ago
sad for me is beautiful thus your poem is beautiful. i like how it's a direct, no-frills piece , it .. read moresad for me is beautiful thus your poem is beautiful. i like how it's a direct, no-frills piece , it attracts me to it. it's a ten on any scale. it is thought-provoking in that it reminds me of a song, which has to be my favorite set of lyrics ever, "like a friend" by pulp where they are singing about a similar situation. i like the ambiguity in the last stanza where the person will get what they deserve though the person is not deserving but they will get the best anyway. such is his love. i like your depiction of this kind of relationship. it is accurate.
Great video. It's so immaterial that I lose focus because you're trying to contain a universe within one author. Nice instrumental. Cool video. Just downloaded it!
This was wonderful Cole, I actually like the quirky way you say "I can give it to you" but I can put a twist on it to make it a bit unlike anyone else. :)
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