The Areas With You With Me

The Areas With You With Me 

The stick in the reeds,

Against thoughts mundane. 

The pretty focus clearly --

Of seams in a seamless dress

Or on a calm sea

 

Where dance cut shapes

Over faces making faces,

And etched riverbanks

On the back of their second

Face. Or their hilly eyes.

 

Where you’re the blonde on the dart

Flights, the pack Alvin packed

In his pocket pouch for

The tournament. Blonde like

Cali. Or blonde like playboys.

 

Where, over this, I cut hurry-up-patience in

Cake slices and manic leaches float

Between the breakwaters dark.

Where all is good in the old village

Where all is good in the new town. 

 

Reviews

[Debbie_Philly]

Very beautiful.... loved the music as well it goes with the piece... well done !! :)

[MOON]

I am always enchanted by your surreal turn of phrase , the way the words dance on the page and their deeper meaning , to be read and retread. Lovely !

[MOON]

Ha , ha! reread my friend.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Your unique perspective comes to the fore in this one, your phrases are really thought provoking, very well done!

[Samantha Lynn]

You could go far in writing if you really wanted it. I can see you being successful with this career based off of how original and unique your works end up. I don't know how you do it. I honestly wish my writing was like yours! :) Keep it up! Love :D

[eglantine]

I feel like it's been a bit since I've read your poetry. I'm glad I read this one :) Lovely title! The diction/syntax is very unique in this piece--your own voice. I had to re-read some lines, forces the reader to slow down. "hilly eyes" is beautiful. Thank you for sharing.

[Corset]

Your writes are always so original and surrealistic with excellent music choices to set the tone of the feelings / ideas you are trying to convey. It's always intellectually stimulating to read your poems Cole.

[Pax]

Where, over this, I cut hurry-up-patience in
Cake slices and manic leaches float
~ smiling... it's clever and smart.. the idea and description is well conveyed... i think you just have the right amout of patience to indulge anything good...
a great piece!