Hurt

I gave this one my all guys, the follow up to "Hail". A poem about love.

Hurt.

I've been lingering here for what seems like forever. 

And my presence won't give up the ghost.

Even though I know that you might not hear me, 

I still shout out your name. 

You once said things won't ever be the same.

Captivating all this melancholy with one haunting glare,

The sanity that had taken me is slowly seeping away. 

And all I can do is stare. 

For some reason I always dream about you, 

And you've taken a piece of me every time I submerge. 

Changing my complexion with your ever changing light, 

Taking a place in this transcendence. 

Inside of this vestige I will awaken from my slumber, 

And my wounds will still call for you, 

Even though I don't know you in this reality. 

Im willing to go through with this,

All i need is your precious solitude 

Bashful in beauty and in purity.

For you I will fall apart and start over. 

Suicidal tendencies only metaphorically,

But the darkness is always taken literately. 

I don't know if I will dream of you tonight, 

I don't even know if I will dream at all.

But if we did have to meet once again 

On the coldness of that deep blue stone bridge, 

I will tell you everything that I wish I could now.

And hereafter or ever after, 

I will pat myself on the back, 

Even though it still hurts.  

Author's Note

this is the most personal piece I have ever written. I gave it my all.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. Words not said leave us in sadness later in a life.
"But if we did have to meet once again
On the coldness of that deep blue stone bridge,
I will tell you everything that I wish I could now."
I like the strong ending. Life teaches us. Better have tried then to wished you had did. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Kitty Robinson]

emotional and very well pieced together, GREAT!

[Lily Mae]

Excellent write and that last line seals it well.. x

[Tsukin Archangel]

i love it :3 it shows your emotions very clearly, and it was excellently done i might add~ anyway *100/100 in my book :3

[Serenity Faith]

Hopelessly beautiful. Love is as easy as it is hard, but then, the most enjoyable things always are.

[nigrum homonculus]

out of all the poems i have read...this one of the most honest. i felt like i was going through everything you was, your wordplay is just amazing. seriously. my hat is off to you. well done

[Nightingale]

This is so heartfelt and emotional. Wonderful piece.

[Celestial Witch Child]

Wow. You have outdone yourself! (: Absolutely amazing.

[olla]

I have watched and listened as you found your voice.. the depth of your passion moves me.. I praise your willingness to become vulnerable.. don't become mute again.. no matter what.. you have a truth that deserves to see the light of life on the page.. and a soul that has lived longer than you.. trust it..

[Olivia Marie]

Tis amazing! As all your pieces are. I really do love the way you pair things together. I wouldn't change any of it!