Absolutely Horrible

A short little poem I wrote this evening, enjoy!

Absolutely Horrible

All of this is just red tape. 

I have no patience to act patient, 

I can't continue to go on being like this. 

 

I'm sorry for everything I have become, 

I'm sorry for everything I have done, 

Except everything that I enjoyed. 

Push the envelop once again (by pushing your buttons), 

Is there really a need to be so absolutely horrible?

Stomp on my will to fly, 

Tell me that I'm useless.

I might just believe you..

Reviews

[AlieahRose]

THE TITILE IS...
WAS DREW ME...
AND THE WORDS...
KEPT ME INTERESTED...
THIS IS GOOD...
I CAN RELATE...
THANKS FOR SHARING...
=]...

[♥ Lexii Boo &hea..]

the strong emotion in this piece was great i have felt this emotion before and i have to say it will pass but anyways this was a great piece 100/100 i really hope to see more

[Dayran]

It'll pass. Its the way anything grows. To know something we relate it to what it is not. Keep to your wits.

[Celestial Witch Child]

My only comment is that envelope has an "e" on the end. Amazing work as always.

[Coyote Poetry]

Every poem had a purpose. I believe you reached your purpose with this poem. Strong statements made the poem create emotion of anger and disappointment. I did like the ending. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Falling Leaf.]

I agree with the others. There a few lines that got to me, but the poem just doesn't...shine. Your emotions, the meaning, that's all fantastic. You could try a rewrite, maybe?

Kindest regards and best of luck,
Savannah

[Laura Maidah]

Great conceptually; poor delivery. The line: I can't go on being like this, pretty much sums up the entire poem. It's just verbal discourse. It's not really poetry; people talk like this all the time. You're really deep. Try digging for it. The red tape idea? I'm confused as to how that ties in. It's just in the first line, and the last line talks to someone unspecified. And the "patience" line is my only good one. It's really great. Nice little inversion.

[Olivia Marie]

It doesn't read like your other poems. I like the meaning behind it, but it really just isn't... Isn't that great. It's good. But it's not really good. I'm sorry...

[nigrum homonculus]

i do feel the emotion in this and the ending is pretty good. i do like some of your wordplay in it. a pretty decent write my friend. you did well.