Between Life and Art

free verse

I want to reach with you

~ for us to outstretch our palms

towards the gleaming sun

and grasp that mystery

between life and art

~ to let our fingers

meet with whispering wind,

intertwining in its gentle caress

amid the light of our smiles.

Sometimes I wonder

how such a moment

comes to life,

one where heaven chimes

its gentle harp

and time interlaces

with our fingertips,

caressing our hearts

in the warmth

of a distant flame.

I want to live with you,

somewhere between

the softness of a glowing moon

and the tumultuous clash

of an ocean against its shore,

or where fiery lava cools

at the touch of rain,

as if it were but passion

grasping for a softer hand.

I want us to embrace life,

to feel its flaring heat

and touch the waking of its sighs.

Like a spark ignites a candle,

I want something so intense

yet so delicate.

Author's Note

I realized that I hadn't written any free verse in a while and (after half an hour of scribbling down random thoughts) I finally managed to carve one out. I'm not sure if this piece makes sense or not, but does it at least have an impact? Please leave an honest review. Constructive criticism is more than welcome. I would especially appreciate any advice regarding the last stanza as I feel I could've ended this piece a lot stronger.

Reviews

[Fahmida Mehreen]

"I want to live with you,
somewhere between
the softness of a glowing moon
and the tumultuous clash
of an ocean against its shore,

or where fiery lava cools
at the touch of rain,
as if it were but passion
grasping for a softer hand."

Portrayal of an invincible love. Most people in love, aiming for their dreams together shall ditto this. After all, this life is too short to be hopeless. :)

Thank you for sharing this.

[William Liston]

I'm glad to see you back! Haven't heard from you in a while.
Thank you for your kind words.

[mercy party]

this was very picturesque. nice one!

[William Liston]

Thank you.

[richieb]

William,
I think the last stanza wraps up your poem. You write of wanting a relationship that is intense yet has its delicate moments.
I believe the imagery of your words put this thought in the readers mind. Your poem was well written showing the poets yearnings and desires.
Peace my friend,
Richie b.

[William Liston]

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed.