On a foggy night

free verse; inspired by stars

I love foggy nights,

seeing specks of mist play in the sky

as stars, with their faint beams,

peer through dusty clouds ...

humid air seeping through my lungs

as I daze upon my dreams.

On nights like this,

I see faces hidden in the stars,

and they have eyes as real and piercing

as the demons dancing in my imagination.

I envision them ―

their piercing gazes 

concealed behind distant darkness 

and fuming fog.

Tonight,

I'm among those stars,

a fiery inferno raging within me.

Step too close,

and the flame within my eyes

will scorch your bare skin,

for tonight,

my heart is sharper

than a raven's claw

pierced through stainless steel.

My soul surges with freedom,

as my speech,

like space and time itself,

resembles the clamorous sounds 

of a soft symphony,

shattering like painted glass

against a shrouded rose.

Author's Note

Thank you for reading. Please leave an honest review. Constructive criticism is more than welcome.

The rough draft of this piece can be found in my blog.

Reviews

[Emily L]

I love foggy nights as well. On those nights, the nighttime reveals to us secrets it's been hiding in the sky during dusk. The fog reveals to us how the mist and the stars come out to play in the darkness. Very lovely descriptive poem. The way you look at the nighttime is truly beautiful. Very pleasant read William...I loved it!

[William Liston]

Thank you, Emily ... that's a wonderful way to put it : )

[Quinn W]

William, I envy you. The way you write so smoothly with so much emotion. They way your metaphors flow into your writing so well. This piece (and all of your others, of course you f-ing perfect human) was absolutely beautiful.

[William Liston]

Thank you so much Quinn :)
I'm glad you enjoyed.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Publish it now. No planning needed. :) This one is so good. It offers a very calm reading with great imaginations about what a foggy night could offer. Keep writing.

[William Liston]

Thank you so much. I just published the rough draft in my blog, by the way

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Tonight,
I'm among those stars,
a fiery inferno raging within me.

I liked the soft tone of this and the vivid imagination. I've come to really appreciate the stars in a poem. They add on to the quality of a write. On the whole, I loved the first stanza the best.
Well penned. I enjoyed reading this 😊👍

[William Liston]

Thank you for your kind words. Glad you enjoyed.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, William. Always a pleasure reading your works 😊

[Najam Us Saher]

I liked the imagery and the soft tone of this poem. It was really very descriptive and beautifully written about the night sky.

[William Liston]

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed.

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome ☺

[Stacy Purvis]

Wow. VERY descriptive, the analogies were dead on. Fabulous.
Easy, fun read, and well, you know I just love roses! : )

[William Liston]

Thank you so much. And yes, roses are beautiful, aren't they : )

[Stacy Purvis]

Yessim. : )))