The Unspoken

A dedication to a girl that may never read this...

The Unspoken
A Poem by Colton Warr

What is thy bidding, my dark haired princess?
Just name the place and I'll be present in an instant
What if you did? Just breathe my name into the air
And send with it an invitation but only if you dare

Your beauty has slowly dripped all over my feed
Now, to meet you is something that I need
I can't explain it, I seem to be broken
Can I speak to you what is never spoken?

What is thy wish, my living dream?
For you are tearing my heart at its very seam
Would you take a chance and reach out for my hand?
And do these things that I humbly command?

I long to know you, I long for a taste
For us to collide, perhaps you should brace
Only one chance is all that I desire
And, doll, nothing else will you ever require

And what if we did it? Let's kill the games
Bury the corpses along with the shame
I know you're wild and I do not wish to tame
I just want to be the one that you claim

Reviews

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

This is lovely, and your desire directly pen'ed.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I am glad you enjoyed this one! Thanks for giving it a read!

[barleygirl]

This is hitting on all cylinders!!! I love the rhyme & rhythm, plus your word construction & storytelling is vivid & clear. Most of all, you've captured the most perfect balance between begging this other person, yet also doing it with a light touch, so as to honor his/her independent nature. This is so pertinent to today's online friendships, where we never meet half the people we engage with in so many meaningful ways. We're dying to meet face-to-face, yet we hold back with fear of the many rejections & abandonments that are doled out regularly. This message is so powerful, it's something I think about often, as I'm sure many people do. Very relatable & well-stated.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I am so glad you enjoyed this! I appreciate the kind and encouraging words! This is a situation I am currently going through, actually. So we'll see what happens. I'm sure there will be a follow-up poem about the outcome :) Thanks so much for reading!

[barleygirl]

Feel free to read request me on any continuation of this saga . . . (((HUGS)))

[Mayank]

Lovely piece, also I see there is a distance created between two lovers which is similar to my life real story. The way I long and the way I crave for her, I could find my feelings in your words.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I'm so glad you could put yourself within these words and find a personal meaning to them. That's one of the biggest compliments a writer can receive! I appreciate you taking the time out to read this one!

[wordman]

sweet sentiment,send it to her

[Colton Warr]

You think so?! Perhaps I'll give it some thought. Thanks for leaving your thoughts! I appreciate you checking this piece out!

[Valentine]

If you have someone show this to her she might give you more than just a chance. You step out....take that chance. Only 2 answers. YES or NO> Valentine

[Colton Warr]

I love your advice, Val! It's bold like this piece! Perhaps I will give it some thought. Thank you so much for giving this a read! I'm sure you'll know if something happens between us because there will likely be a prom about it :)

[Quinn W]

Wow! This is beautiful! The word choice and rhyming is amazing! There's so much emotion in this!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece! Thank you for the kind words and thank you for giving this a read! Peace to you!

[Mavericks]

Well, What a Lovely Piece. Sounds like Romeo is in Love again. With Love, Pain is inevitable; Two sides of the Same coin. Buddy If she is your Soulmate, I bet she will read this, Some Day, If not today. And, If she doesn't, Move on. Loved the Last Stanza. =)

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much!!! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and were able to feel the emotion in it! You're exactly right, love and pain go hand in hand. It's terrible and beautiful at the same time. Your advice is sound. I appreciate you sharing your thoughts! Thank you for giving this a read!

[Bear]

Bravo! Bold and expressive, a testament of affection a dedication of devotion and a plea of hopeful expectation all in one. Well thought out and masterfully worded I give it 5 out of 5 Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Colton Warr]

I love the way you described this because that is exactly how I felt when I penned it! Right on the head, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed the emotion and the longing in this. Thank you so much for giving this a read! I appreciate your support! Peace to you, my friend!