The Hour Glass

Buried beneath the Sand...

                                                  The HourGlass

                                          A Poem by Colton Warr

                                     The hourglass haunts as I bleed 

                                      The sands, they do slip ever so, 

                                        Soft hands attempt to lead, 

                                         But, know not where to go,

                                           Stop them from falling,

                                               lights from passing, 

                                                The sand calling,

                                                     Amassing,

                                                     Crashing, 

                                                 I do try stalling,

                                              And I do try asking,

                                           But the failure is galling, 

                                      And the answer is soundly no

                                    These words, sand cannot read,

                                   so falling is the only thing it knows, 

                            Unconscious to the desperation of my need. 

         

Author's Note

Anyone else feel as if they are running out of time? As if time itself is against them?

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

I think many of us feel that we are running out of time, especially when we are aged... the clock keeps moving at it's normal pace...but we do not...our pace changes, and it is sometimes frightening....our needs are not ever met....we feel as if everything is falling away...because we can't keep the pace....I like your style',writing, metaphors, quite imaginative and vivid
Thank you for sharing
Warmly, B

[Colton Warr]

The clock does, indeed, move at its normal pace as we feel we need to race.....falling away indeed....Thank you, Betty!

[Betty Hermelee]

Many people feel as if they are running out of time...especially those over 80....time does not slow for them...I like your metaphors with the sand and other vivid images to show us how time passes in different ways..."but the failure is galling"....."So falling (the hourglass) is the only thing it knows" .....lovely writing
Thank you for sharing!
Warmly, B

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Betty! I am so happy that you consumed this and resinated with it. I appreciate your kind words and that you took the time to read this!

[Betty Hermelee]

It is my pleasure!
Warmly, B

[Kenneth The Poet]

Man, this is one hell of a piece.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much for the kind words and for giving this a read!

[Cendrine Marrouat]

I always enjoy reading concrete poetry. It's an art form in itself and doesn't get enough recognition. I felt the second part of the poem deeply.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I appreciate the kind words. I appreciate you giving this a read!

[Chris Shaw]

Sadly as the years go by, awareness increases that the sand is moving faster through the hour glass. Time becomes more precious, as does living in the moment, not the past or the future. Make each day count. You express this situation well in your poem.

Chris

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I appreciate you giving this piece a read and thank you for the encouraging words! Make each day count indeed!

[Weeping willow]

Time is passing more quickly, and your words express it so well ;-] Nicely done

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I appreciate you giving this piece a read and the kind words!

[syndeton]

I love how you captured the journey from realisation to desperation to a form of acceptance, and it’s really cool how the shape of the poem contributes to that feeling!

[Colton Warr]

I am glad you enjoyed this piece and I very much appreciate the read!

[redd Brick Keshner]

Yes, and that can be a constant and belligerent source of anxiety!🙏🏻🕊️

[Colton Warr]

Yes, it sure can! Thank you for reading and leaving a review!

[redd Brick Keshner]

Most welcome, mate 🕊️🙏🏻

[Nova]

Remarkable. I truly love how you've capture this feeling so well!

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much! I appreciate the read and review!