She Said "I'll Be There for You"

She loved me when I was beneficial.

Then she dumped me when I was mentally crippled.

I said I needed her and I truly meant it.

Maybe I was dumb or slightly demented.

I wanted someone to care for, someone that made me truly feel.

I was scared that I might have it, but the fear had some appeal.

I fought with tooth and nail against the ones who said they cared.

For my troubles I am left with naught but disrepair.

I can’t even hate you! All I have is a single tear.

Perhaps it’s because there is no trace, just memories of when you left me here.

Reviews

[smilempsn]

Oopsiee.. that should have hurt yaa..

Well I hope that was not written with personal experince...

[Baby Ricochet]

This is a good poem. Really, it is. It's got good flow. It's funny in spots and sad too. Great Job Commanda Panda

[Commanda Panda]

Thanks.

[Emily B]

I spent a long time telling men I wanted to be there for them. That I loved them. They all called me a liar. Well, one of the three said you may think you love me, but i don't believe you :)

But to tell the honest truth I don't think they loved me the way they thought they did either

[Commanda Panda]

Things like that take a lot of time to prove. Talk is cheap.

[Emily B]

where to start? where to start?

[Commanda Panda]

Are you targeting me?

[Emily B]

targeting? i don't follow

[Commanda Panda]

Don't worry about it.

[Emily B]

just enjoying your witty conversation

[Commanda Panda]

I was wittier when I was tipsy. Probably more inclined to flirt as well.

[Emily B]

you flirted?

[Commanda Panda]

Can't remember. lol

[Emily B]

i woke up with one helluva hangover . . .

[Commanda Panda]

i didn't, but my back was killing me

[Emily B]

poor panda

[Commanda Panda]

nah. thats what tylenol is for

[Emily B]

pass the bottle please

[Commanda Panda]

No! Mine!

[Emily B]

it's been fun, but alas, the laundry and the dishes are calling my name, such is the life of the old woman in the shoe

[Commanda Panda]

You have lots of kids?

[Emily B]

i had three, two more moved in

and there's all the other kids that i teach to sew and stuff

[Commanda Panda]

Three is a lot.

[Emily B]

maybe, it's a good thing i'm not a typical woman

[Commanda Panda]

I agree. Typical is boring.

[Vria P Crow]

Oh wow, dude.

I am so sorry:(

My advice though is that it does happen. That just means you have to find someone who accepts you for you.

G i r l P e r s p e c t i v e

1. Girl: "Normal"
2. Boy: "Abnormal"

haha To be honest, we can never win in this world.


RHYME SCHEME

1. Lyrical Feel
2. Passion
3. Repetition

MUSIC OPTIONS

1. Angry music:D

[Commanda Panda]

So, you hear music in your head, too. It's just something that happened way back when that comes back to haunt you when you've had a couple of drinks. I don't regret having this baggage with me for some reason.

[Vria P Crow]

lmao haha Um...Yes, I do hear music in my head because I use it for my artwork to influence the effect.

1. Drinking
2. Weed
3. Narcotics

Well, you get the jist. It happens. I honestly did not realize it because I never actually did that stuff often. I am more of a hippi.

[Commanda Panda]

My music comes from alien transmissions being forced into my brain.

[Vria P Crow]

You know what. I had a few "Signs" moments myself. However, I realize that is just psychology.
read moreYou know what. I had a few "Signs" moments myself. However, I realize that is just psychology.

Who knows though.
Aliens could totally exist!

[Commanda Panda]

Well, that was just a joke. However, I have had run ins with gods, angels and demons. It's not as great as it may initially sound.

[Vria P Crow]

hehe I am a literal person. That is how you know I am a female:P

[Commanda Panda]

Really? Most females I meet beat around the bush and are cryptic about what they want.

[Vria P Crow]

haha I know. But I have to be careful. I wanted to be a teacher. I do not want to be anymore for my own reasons.

[Commanda Panda]

You have nothing to fear from me. It's been quite some time since I've been a student in a secular sense.

[Vria P Crow]

Thank god.

[Vria P Crow]

Still, I am off to write and review.
Nice talking to you:D

[Commanda Panda]

I will miss you.

[Vria P Crow]

haha I am an illusion, dude!

[Commanda Panda]

Illusion are almost always better than reality.

[Vria P Crow]

From now on though, take discussions to the poetry at hand on my page. Respect dude, respect:D
read moreFrom now on though, take discussions to the poetry at hand on my page. Respect dude, respect:D