Chained

If you'll be a slave for life, atleast you can choose your master for life.

I just wanted to be free but he chained me down
Could not believe one fond of the word freedom now wanted me down.
It was okay breaking rules and he helped me all the time
The difference now is, "these are made by him. "
I never knew his gentle lips could hold a terrifying grin
His sweet compliments, he showered me all the time
Now he spur's swords and acid
Is it not this same face you used to adore?
Now you have me in chains.

Author's Note

Anything you notice to be off.. Let me know.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

For a fairly brief message, you sure pour a bunch of intensity into this! What I love most is how your narrator does NOT blame the other person. This is the most realistic & true-to-life for me, becuz we blame ourselves for our bad choices, instead of blaming the person who hurts us. This line sounds "off": "now he spur's swords and acid" . . . the word "spur's" does not sound right to me . . . I would remove the apostrophe (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Iam-me]

This is epic, powerful and sadly so true. A lot of relationships turn sour when you find your lover turns out not to be who you thought they were.

[Bertha]

But isn't it at times we allow ourselves be cheated?

[Iam-me]

i guess so, we think we are not worth love and true affection, so hate ourselfs.

[Bertha]

Yes. We belittle ourselves

[Dave]

This is powerful! You seem so sure. so confident in yourself. Good for you.
It is so easy to read the anguish you feel at the betrayal of what you thought was true of him only to find him so different.

Take care - Dave

[Bertha]

It really can be breaking how you felt everything to be perfect but you find out to be so different.
Thank you

[Rye]

This is such a powerful little write, nicely expressed

[Bertha]

Thank you Rye. Thanks for sparing your time to read this.

[Jade]

Wow! This is gripping, I enjoyed this write, Shows someone who takes no crap