A better option

I'm not a dirty elevator button
that you press and I go down on you
The way you treat a heart
Is worse than how a
Constipated man treats
toilet paper.
Instead of giving my
Heart to you I should've
put it in a crumpled brown bag
And thrown it away in the bin.
One for non-recycled waste.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Next to last line I read as "And throw it away"
but this is such a clever metaphor ride...
my kind of poetry...off color, but in a tasteful, poetic way.
j.

[Tania Mo]

Tq Jacob. Off color is good at times.

[Chris Shaw]

This one is a deserved kick in the teeth for one who treats his woman like a doormat. Feisty write Tania.

Chris

[Tania Mo]

Thanks :)

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I like metaphor to be just pushing button at elevator. This person obviously use you without even notice you exist. Sometimes is better stay off from wrong affection. Great poem here.

[Tania Mo]

Thanksx :)

[Mr. D]

You should know better than to give your heart to anyone. Why anyone would is beyond me. Relationships are laughable.

[Tania Mo]

Thanks :)

[JMichael]

Ouch! Such strong words here, Tania. Some excellent examples conveyed here, even if the subject matter is quite sad and morbid. The pain and anger shines through in your words. Its a powerful piece of brevity. Strong work!

[Tania Mo]

Thank u :)