Pain After

The fruit of lust
can be pain.
Today's romp in
ripe fields maybe
tomorrow's painful
abortion in a
quack's dirty shed

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Even tho your imagery is blunt & realistic (first lust, then abortion) I read these as symbols for a more universal leap of lust. Like the way we invite a person into our lives, but when we find out he/she is an embarrassment, we take them out to the shed & dig out the offending abscess making this person "not OK". Or the way we are fooled by satisfaction of the flesh before we discover it plants a painful seed of torment which must be borne or destroyed (I don't mean a human embryo, but the seed of whatever abuse or discontent happens in the course of seeking pleasure of the flesh only -- perhaps hangovers or DUI's or financial devastation). So much to think about for such a brief straightforward sounding poem! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[poetgurl]

Wow, quite powerful imagery here

[Tania Mo]

Thanx Ang-X. :)

[Laz K.]

"No rainbow without rain"
It's true that there might be pain, but would it be better not to give in and wish you would have?
Oh well, you're probably right...:)

[Tania Mo]

Lol yeah I am doomed either way so I won't give in. Thanx Laz. :)

[Wild Rose]

The fruit of lust can be a pain
if you insist and do it in the rain

Oh my back aches _ rhumastick something like that the quack says

[Tania Mo]

Nicely said. Thanks. :)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Oh dear this really sounds fearsome but me I'm a good kitty and I never go romping around.

[Tania Mo]

Then youre safe. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

And especially painful to the heart and conscience---
intensity in your writes...you are so compact with your words, but the ideas expressed are infinite.

j.

[Tania Mo]

Thanks. I think in pictures. :)

[AJNJ]

Lol. True words of wisdom here. Avoid the corn fields if you wish to avoid the shed.

[Tania Mo]

Thanks AJ. :)