Nothing

Please take my pain my life away,

erase my world my dreams.

Take my sight, my breath,

hold hostage my blackened heart.

Chain away this shell,

imprison my darkened soul.

Punish my humanity until I break,

hurt me until I bleed.

Tear down the walls I built

flatten any hope left.

Beat into this body remorse,

self loathing and hate.

Deserving of nothing die bitter

and in the shadows...alone.

Reviews

[Jinx's Heart]

I can't tell you how well this poem reaches my own feelings. It truly touches the heart and shows the true despair and desperation of the author. Your talent is very evident. I love the fluency and obviously the tone is very well placed within the context of the poem. I really, really like this work. Well done!

[Miss Coral]

Very powerful piece- I love the use of language and the smooth rhythm. I would consider varying the imagery a bit, and offering a bit more visually, but otherwise this was fantastic. Great write.

-Coral-

[David W Moore III]

How often do we berate ourselves with guilt, we see all of our flaws, moreso than our worst enemies, it is easy to get caught up in that. we also tend to discount the good we do. Sometimes, you need to stop and find one good thing about you. Just one, and praise yourself, to offset all the faults. Powerfully written, and heartbreaking

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That was straight up raw... sounds like a soul with a lot of guilt to work through... I will say the emotional pain flows out of this piece like a raging river.

[Hippy]

its strong depressing dark and powerful, the only part i disliked was the constant use of my in the first few lines, it may have worked if you keep it up but i think it harms your flow, the rest i did enjoy alot

[Dream Weaver]

Dark and forboding, self inficting pain
and the stuggle within...a very eye
opening write.

[Kelley]

Now tell me what that was about.
It was beautifully written but kind of
sad. I guess we get this way from time to time.
From loss, love,hunger, hate of just life in general.

[Demosthenes]

Good s**t.

[karmic]

This is a very nice and powerful piece, i love the lines:

hold hostage my blackened heart.

Chain away this shell,

imprison my darkened soul.

Punish my humanity until I break,

Great job.