Stranger

sometimes i feel like this

 

Stranger

 

 

In a place,

I don’t recognize.

 

In a life,

That isn’t mine.

 

In a family,

That doesn’t belong to me.

 

In this place,

I seem a stranger.

Like I’m on the outside,

Looking in on all these people,

And I don’t know them.

 

Why should this happen?

Why do I feel so?

I feel alone and like I just hover around.

I’d rather be in my room alone,

Than out there with all those people.

 

Not much conversation,

So it makes me feel more isolated.

Everyone is having their problems or joys,

And I just watch from afar.

 

A stranger.

 

Author's Note

maybe some commas in places they dont need to be.....i was just taught to do that, it's a habit

Reviews

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

i have never felt like i was loved very much in my family, or that i belonged. this poem was to let everyone know how it feels, and it was great! i couldn't have said it any better myself!

keep up the good work!

~may

[Mr. Lopez]

I try not to concern myself too much with the structure of the poem, unless it really effects the rythme and flow. I didn't see anything like that here. But it was the content that caught my attention. I am not sure of your age but when I was younger I felt this same way. Until I spent many hours/days in nature/the outdoors , I really didn't know myself . I felt a stranger in my own skin. I liked how well you have relayed that feeling into this poem . Very nice.

[Justin Tobey]

This poem transmits feelings of being misunderstood and lonely. I know this feeling very well from when I was younger.

The poem itself is quite good. Like you said, there are some unnecessary commas, but I completely understand. Good job!