Fifteen Minutes

I was kinda just sittin here... waiting fifteen minutes to call someone back... I like snails

I cant feel my finger nails

Maybe it was licking snails

Inhale

I cant feel my hands

Maybe from digging deep sands

Exhale

I cant feel my brain

Thats because of chemical stain

Fail

Reviews

[Johnny]

its not all random. You got talent when it comes to writing

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

Randomness... awesome!!!!

[*Kantola*]

an extremely random poem... I LIKE IT! Random people are awesome... GO RANDOMNESS! W-HOO!!!
Licking snails? Yummy... ><
Nice imagery!

Love the randomness! The snails are sweet too! I like the fact also that you wrote inhale, exhale, and fail.

[Vanessa]

Firstly, I ADORE the last stanza. 'Chemical stain' makes me imagine some dangerous chemical seeping into the squiggles of some brain....
And, no, that's not a bad thing. Despite the graphic brain picture, I thought it had a somewhat positive feel.

And the fact that you put that abstract image in my brain makes me smile. I freaking love this.

--Vanessa Alyse

[Lady Insomnia]

I love the randomness of it. Snails are awesome >_

[Elemiah]

Wow...this is a weird, random poem, but that's probably why I like it. It's always hard having to wait to call someone back when you really want to talk to them. I also like the breathing words, good job on this.