The Hidden Monster

Silent tears
Muffled screams
So no one can hear me

Words unsaid
Stories untold

No more sparks
No more heart
Everything left dark so I can't see
You've blinded me

You've taken me
Locked me up
And thrown me to the ground

I really don't want to be
A part of your scandal
No, please no

I guess you only wanted me
To make yourself feel better

I guess I was too lonely
To even really care

But now I know
That you've only left me lonlier

I guess I'll write my feelings here on paper
That way I know they're here for safe keeping

Sad and scared is what I am
I really don't know what's happening

So I sit and think of you
And what you've been hiding

The things hidden beneath

Author's Note

This was very random.

Reviews

[luvs2write]

WOW...just wow. I really liked reading this. It was so powerful. "I guess I was too lonely to really even care"...my favorite line. I can completely relate to this poem. Great work...=)

[Cool Girl]

Yeah, I was feeling really bad while writing this.. I've always been a loner..
But thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it :)

[Confuser]

I liked it very much. Really scary....really sad - sounds like someone was hurt very badly and trust have been taken away. Thank you. Dale

[Cool Girl]

thanks for reviewing, Dale! I've missed your wonderful reviews lately:)

[Confuser]

Y/W Cool Girl; I'm here and I'm sorry. Been reading some stories; I analyze: over-analyze: I'm slow...I'll be visiting soon. Thank you for the wonderful writing!

[Cool Girl]

It's alright, Dale. I'm glad to see you on though! Thanks again :)

[Confuser]

So kind.....You're welcome!

[SheDragon16]

This was very Good great imagery. My Father was abusive too my mother so having that background I think you really captured the feel of someone being abused.

[Cool Girl]

Thank you. Im so sorry that your dad was like that.

Best wishes,

C.G.

[DoormanDan]

I love how EVERYTIME you say something is random, it turns out to be really AWESOME. you are a writer that not only goes out of your comfort zone a lot, but also succeeds everytime!

[Cool Girl]

Awe, thanks, Dan! That just made me smile:)

[Emily]

Sometimes I feel this way.
One of my favorite poems of yours!
Well done!

[Cool Girl]

Wow, thanks! :)

[Elie Marie]

I could definitely relate to the beginning of this.
It's all well done.

[Cool Girl]

Thanks so much!

[Niall Madden]

Enjoyed this
"You've taken me
Locked me up
And thrown me to the ground"
this rally presented imagery of this "monster" beating you up, throwing you in a cell and locking away the key a truly picturesque image of defeat.

[Cool Girl]

Thanks so much! :)

[Niall Madden]

no problem

[Lizardo]

Okay this is deep and probably refers to people who appear to be something they aren't kind of like hidden masks, like why in the world would they want to treat you bad? what is really the whole point of doing that? and what does that win? Satisfaction? I don't think so, The hunger for more will come until you're only ashes and stones.
You know, this probably my new fav from you, Made me think.
''So I sit and think of you
And what you've been hiding''
True when we feel betrayed, we just take a moment and let time and space stop for a second and thing about what the person did to us and how heartless they are
The last line gave it a nice endind
''The things hidden beneath''
Now days, we don't know if our great friend can be the one who stabs us in the back (I wen throught that experience, wasn't pleasent)
It's like saying: ''Well, the things hidden beneath'' In ironics words
Woah, this is really one great poem you've donde here!
(and my longest review too xD)
Excellent poem!!

[Cool Girl]

Haha, thanks so much! Yeah, this really was your longest reveiw xD
I'm really glad you liked it, and I'm glad it made you think. I've had a best friend stabb me in the back once, it wasn't very pretty.... Anyway, thanks again for the reveiw and kindness!

[Lizardo]

You are welcome :)