Walls

Men the stone walls that we are.

You can’t shed a tear without being scrutinized.

There is no such thing as feelings for us.

Everyone wants us to be dry walls of dust.

No emotions no love just hatred and lust.

What they don’t know is the bottle that fills inside of us

Then when it break they wonder why.

The man had wanted everyone to die.

Reviews

[Raccoony]

I can imagine this piece to be made into music lyrics that I'd want to listen to over and over again on my iPod. ヽ(o´∀`)ﾉ♪♬ My fav is: "There is no such thing as feelings for us...Everyone wants us to be dry walls of dust." The rhyming throughout is consistent and catchy.

Nit-picky that I am... I'd just correct a small detail: "Then when it break(S), they wonder why... the man himself that needed anyone... and wanted everyone... to die."

Gah~ New reader right here!

[Antoñyo]

Thought-provoking piece. This could also be a song made longer.
Good luck and Thanks!

[Kimberly Miller]

That was amazing! You gave us an inside look at how it feels and what is expected of men these days. True guys get what you just wrote!

[Sunny]

Wow very nice! I do think it relates to a lot of the men out there. Nice work.