Old House

A trimeric poem for a contest

Wandering most everywhere

I passed once by that small creek

Finding our old house there

Where I used to hide and seek.

 

I passed once by that small creek

Where wild grasses grew so tall,

And I looked over the wall.

 

Finding our old house there,

With gossamer nets as drapes,

With my grandpa's sour grapes.

 

Where I used to hide and seek

All the trees were almost dried,

I looked back again and cried...

Author's Note

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Reviews

[angelina neves]

wonderful!

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

Thank you very much.

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

Where I used to hide and seek

All the trees were almost dried,

I looked back again and cried...


................very fine lines. I like the style of writing. It has touched my heart. It is my experience also. Good. With regards.

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

Thanks, The truth is that I lost my grandpa not so long ago and this poem is for him and our old house.

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

Yes I understood. I have written the same in Tamil Language one lyric long back i.e., 7 years before. Both are having the same feeling and experience. Good.

[Tate Morgan]

a wonderful rhyme I think it follows a few of my cardinal rules short sweet and perfect rhymes

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

Many thanks, I am happy you liked it.

[Tate Morgan]

you are welcome

[Helen Crutchett]

Nostalgic and bitter/sweet memories. I felt like that when I revisited a farm I used to have holidays as a child. It wrenches at your heart for some reason. Very good write. Thank you for submitting this to the contest!

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

Thank you very much Helena.

[Helen Crutchett]

You are most welcome!

[Dr. Wood ?]

its hard to let go...Good words these...

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

you are very kind Dr Wood :)

[....]

this is a real tugger, love the ending.
wonderful picture used as well

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

Thank you so much, me too I love this picture.

[....]

i can't get pictures to go into my writes. I wish i could.

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

I usually take pictures from flickr, sometimes I use my own pictures.

[....]

i can't get them to post in my writes all i get is an x showing where the picture would be.

[Cristina Moldoveanu]

You copy from flickr the HTML code for the size you like, then you paste it on your poem. After that you have usually to edit it again to make the image visible. For your own images it is simpler with the uploader.

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i'll have to try that thank you