I saw her from afar

 

It was the County Ladies Cycling Association

Annual Dinner Dance and Prize Giving Occasion

I had taken a lady friend

I knew her for several years

Since she was age eleven

Pigtails, basin hair cut,

Looking after younger bros & sisters

She was like a younger sis to me

 

Now at eighteen

A factory girl

But not as the songs says

Head scarf; stout shoes; trousers and coats

Are for work

She wears 'fancy clothes' for going out

Hard work; top pay
Means she can have the best

 

 

I saw her on the stage

Collecting her prize

County Ladies ten mile Time Trial Champion

We were far away

At the back of the room

When I saw her I thought

'She is the one for me'

I looked for her after but never found

It was the County Ladies Cycling Association

Annual Dinner Dance and Prize Giving Occasion

I had taken a lady friend

I knew her for several years

Since she was age eleven

Pigtails, basin hair cut,

Looking after younger bros & sisters

She was like a younger sis to me

 

Now at eighteen

A factory girl

But not as the songs says

Head scarf; stout shoes; trousers and coats

Are for work

She wears 'fancy clothes' for going out

Hard work; top pay
Means she can have the best

 

 

I saw her on the stage

Collecting her prize

County Ladies ten mile Time Trial Champion

We were far away

At the back of the room

When I saw her I thought

'She is the one for me'

I looked for her after but never found

     

Reviews

[Intothemilkyway]

Love how the most important part is repeated. it's like a flashback in a movie.
It really tells how sad he was knowing he meet the girl of his dreams but to never see her again.
Sadly this happens a lot in daily life. We see or know a wonderful person thinking they might be the one, but it's never like that. And it ends with being a literal crush.

[Wild Rose]

Thank you
The repeat (didn't know it did repeat) a typo by the download machine
I didn't check after uploading - quite often I get called away to attend to some domestic problem

NOW should I remove the repeat/ or
Does it make something extra, mean does it make sense

[Intothemilkyway]

No no, don't remove it. I emphasised that cause i loved it. I love when something is repeated. It makes you go back to read it twice and discover more things about the poets feelings.

[Wild Rose]

OK Thank you

[sette]

a surprise ending for me but an interesting write

[Neville]

Not the ending you had hoped for probably but then, you can't have em all... sometimes it is better that the one that got away, got away....... nicely writ tale for sure..... Neville

[Wild Rose]

She got away then > but more to come