Humanity in Need of a Level Up

I need help to make this more understandable

Behind the opaque occult,

there sleep two ancient skulls 

of the first fallen stars.

They are gleaming in dark crystalline perfection.

They are immortal seeds of imperfect mankind-

wingless progeny.

Their lips would smile,

had they still flesh,

amused by the floundering fledglings above-

we are

their arrogant children, 

keeping our selfdom in chains,

hostages to the egos we will not release.

Even the  immortal patience of the dead 

grows thin

with the passing of eons and no sign 

of transcendence.

Earth curves around the skulls.

"What an ungrateful brood", she declares!

"Why on earth do you seed here? 

Our world was divine

and in harmonic serenity, 

lush in green wisdom.

Humans are truculent impostors of life

who trod like inebriates over our flesh

and foul the living waters of our blood."

From stardust we came, 

but here we decay-

leaving chaos and clamor 

in the wake of our lives.

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

The possessors of the two skulls are not named, but they seem to be the original progenitors of humanity. The speaker holds them in reverence, while decrying their descendants for not living up to their potential. Ego appears to be the major fault, and humanity is far from transcending it. Even the earth itself condemns humanity for its failures. The last verse holds out little hope of improvement.

[softlyfall]

I actually agree, I need to somehow mitigate that total hopelessness maybe, something like a volta? I do believe it is the human ego that holds a person back from spiritual elevation and enlightenment, ego needs. But I also believe there is an inherent goodness in mankind. I will think about how to add a ray of hope.

[willweb]

Wow, that was an enchanting picture you painted with your words. Like a small poetic adventure that covers a lot of ground and time and the ending...that sounds about right to me. Very well crafted. I love the imagination shown in this.

[softlyfall]

thank you, I am trying to write less abstractly, with varying degrees of success.