Dervish Rhapsody

Dervish Rhapsody

by Amy MaryJane McFate

I am 

a star, dreaming

of other stars infinity-spinning

like dervish rhapsodies around me as I sleep. 

I seek 

a box of extra stardust for my effigy-

it has a hole in it,

and all the dust is draining out.

I am roughly sewn.

I can no longer tell 

where I begin in the bending light

or where or when or if 

I might conceiveably reach an end.

No end in sight.

No shadowed dome confines me to the room

and I am floating 

falling

flailing for a kite string just out of reach.

Below earth shrinks at a terrifying rate.

What name shall I use when I deflate

my abstract testimonies and existential fate?

The stars surrounding me pulse and contract.

I, too,

pulse and contract.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Me too dear Amy MaryJane McFate.
"No end in sight.
No shadowed dome confines me to the room
and I am floating
falling
flailing for a kite string just out of reach.
Below earth shrinks at a terrifying rate."
In the end. What do we become. Today I seek purpose and reason to be alive. Thank you for the outstanding poetry. You made me think. Our goal, as writers dear poet.
Coyote

[softlyfall]

Thank you again, my poet friend. I am so happy that I wandered back to this unique forum

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear poet.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the last two stanzas...reminds me of dreams in which I am trying so hard to wake...know that I am trying to wake, but just can't.
and the stardust much like sand in an hour glass is sifting away.
How many more dreams can we survive?
Even more stars surround us...did they dream as well?
j.

[softlyfall]

ooo... I love the notion of dreaming stars. a LOT. Oh wow, thank you for something brand new to think about!

[Ken e Bujold]

A grand examination of where one fits inside the great continuum. Terrific images, great choice of diction, and lines are breaking swells
:)
ken

[softlyfall]

Thank you Ken. I am finding that if i slow down and think about the line breaks etc along the way, it helps

[Ken e Bujold]

it usually does, and the improvement in your choices is readily apparent with each new work

[softlyfall]

That's really exciting and motivating

[Richard Knox]

Hello, Amy,
My, this is so full of imagery and brings to mind the pictures and questions about the universe that have come out of the James Webb telescope. Very well done!

[softlyfall]

You know, the most mind blowing thing about the James Webb telescope is that it can see images TOO OLD for the Hubble Space telescope. That is insane, ghost star. I rather love ghosts of all kinds, so this makes me happy