Big Bang

Ok my last poem was apparently incomprehensible...and, trust me, i rarely know what I am talking about either... so, I hope this is more earth-tethered

Big Bang

by Amy MaryJane McFate

Creation lifts her loom and weaves 

a macrocosmic nest

with starry strands of  light.

Within it,  

coiled and sleeping life cocoons 

in orbiting eggs, 

expanding,

while renaissance lullabies hum

to the worlds within carapacial worlds.

Nascent rhythms beat joy filled themes-

Life's awakening dreams within are green-

of singing frogs in damp twilight

ruled by grumbling bullfrog kings.

Life's heart urges inmost wells

begin the oceanic flow of time

 to feed the sapling cells

which will form  her lush 

and curving body,

earth.

 

A storm of shifted energy whirls

and thunderous changes crack 

the eggs-

an emergent  fledgling Universe free falls

through the tears 

in the newborn eye of All.

Wet and glistening 

wings out-fold

and awareness takes first flight

Reviews

[W. Barrett Munn]

I find this fascinating to watch where your mind visits as you contemplate this birth and the comparison of time to tides is captivating.

Winston

[softlyfall]

Thank you Winston, tht means a lot coming form you

[willweb]

I have never heard the creation of the universe sound prettier.
Even Neil Degrassi couldn't have said it so well : ) Honestly, this was beautiful in an ethereal kind of way, you could almost hear the cosmos singing.

[softlyfall]

Thank you, that was really encouraging. I sometimes feel like i am unable to communicate well.

[Ken e Bujold]

earth to amy? you there? amy to earth? where? :)) if puck and gracie allen had of got together and had a union I think it most likely would of could of been Amy MJ McFate. and that's a great thing by the way

[softlyfall]

oh wow... you have no idea how spot on you are
My recipe for happiness? be who you are meant to be.