two faces of adam

based on an article I read recently

He didn't realize he was being watched

this man who thought the world owed him something

giving his uncalled for advice

based on nothing but his ignorance

 

His reasoning became his enemy

turning others away with his criticisms

and his deception remained unnoticed

except to his inner self

 

He used God as his justification

for living up to morals

he decided were the correct

and justly ones

 

But he forgot to practice what he preached

and deep down

inside his soul

he watched, apart from himself

 

 

Reviews

[Chaos]

We are a mirror unto ourselves. On the outside, we as a people comply to society or to the word of God and the world thinks we are good, but our we truly good? A man can share his bread with another and look as if he is kind, but if the other man could see behind and inside the givers eyes and heart, he would see a man who is filled with distaste and disgust for a man that has his hand out for help. Two faced honor is the worst honor to portray

I may smile, but is my heart filled with joy?

Nice write!

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A very well written poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Susan S.]

This isn't a story, it's a poem. You should re-categorize it.

[holly]

I liked the subject matter so much. An interesting and somewhat dispassionate work - which is wonderful, since it so easily could have been a rant. That objectivity helps connect the reader to the speaker's ideas rather than the speaker. Thanks for this.

[LSS]

Whoa, I hope you're not pointing this gun my way. Too often, under self examination, I find myself generating these selfish tendencies, thus, the view sights on me.
Lar

[Meridian]

Hmmm...

After the first two stanzas, I SWORE we knew someone in common... lol

This is mysterious and intriguing. I wish it had gone on... Good stuff here.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Nicelt written. To see from the outside in, sometimes sees best.