DAY TO NIGHT

When  the lights  first went out

the stories circulated about the reason

The blackened sky as night

 the coldness that began

no heat

no transmissions

no denying

no answers

no light

 

They created this, they knew when it started

it would start the beginning of the end

They,   we,   us,   them...all of us

looking to keep the power above others

they created what they thought was strength

loose cannon

it became

a game

played against yourself

and the world

watched

as the powers took us down

the ones we used  to fight

had us lose ourselves

when we lost the light

 

There will be many shocks when we finally see

get over ourselves and realize

and wonder

who is left

what is left

of God's gift to us

that we took and dishonored

built bombs enought to destroy

and then unleashed those powers

we held over others

that took us down

when we lost ourselves

and the light

 

Reviews

[LSS]

I think you've been up late again, with another grade B. Surly man cannot be as thoughtless as that, to end himself with all those he holds dear too. But maybe that's the catch word that condemns us all - thoughtless!
Lar

[Michael Carr]

I really think this is a powerful work driven.
a deep lesson on humanity of today.
shrill and dark, but captivating nonetheless.
good job, my friend.

[Adrian K. Smith]

I suppose I have bought into the lie of peace through the fear of mutual mass annihilation. For so long, we had weapons that could cause destruction - we had weapons that could cause mass destruction. Though there are still little wars here and there, skirmishes, and woefully lives lost - because of the fear of that mutual mass annihilation, the so called super powers have slipped more into a role of hall monitor; keeping an eye on all the other kids. They are no longer as concerned with expansion of land masses, it is a different age. It is about influence, world economy, and just trying to keep their day jobs with a more educated population.

[Leo Gems]

Great message.. We are not above all. We are human beings.. We need to be responsible for our actions. We need to be using the Golden Rule. We need to protect ourselves. We do not need to be the Lord above all others. To be the biggest and the baddest.. should never be the point.

Wonderful write~~ Powerful ink!

[Meridian]

So true. Wow. This is like a glimpse into man's self-imposed Armageddon... and you shined the spotlight on where it all began. Strong subject, powerful write.

[Samuel Dickens]

The chilling truth. It is not we the people, of course, but our reckless, greedy, dishonest, ill-serving government.

[NightDream]

Cool work. I enjoyed how easy it flows and the strength of the message.

[Gray]

What a powerful, emotion-filled statement. And well written, too. It reads well outloud.

Gray