The Darkness

My first creative of poem I've ever really written, very short.

When I see all the lies and sin

I start to feel like evil will win

When I'm greeted by ice stares

I start to wonder if anyone cares.

When the angels cry and the lights begin to dim

I start to think that evil will win

When I feel the weight of expectation on me 

I start to wonder who they really see

When I look around and i see no one

I finally realize that evil has won.

Author's Note

Very new, first creative poem, don't be to harsh please but i'm open to advice ( I need it!)

Reviews

[Leumas Relwood]

I usually write poems with more of a rythym or meter, but I understand there are different types of poetry (and I appreciate that someone is taking advantage of them). I really liked the motif, and especially the altered motif at the end...a very finalizing stanza!

[Leon R]

It's very easy for reading which is awesome. You can make it even better if you add a title but I know sometimes choosing a title is hard task. I struggle myself when I have to name a write.