I Felt The Dagger

Being back stabbed

We use to get along

then things turned wrong

Its nothing more than

I can say,

but I gotta let

you know

I felt the dagger

when you stabbed 

my heart

you didn't even

think twice;

I felt the dagger 

stab me in the back

thanks a lot old foe

I felt the dagger,

yes I did

and it hurts

the dagger

tore me apart

it makes me

seem so less

ahead,

Then I felt the dagger 

stab me

over and over 

again

I felt the dagger 

pierce through 

my skin

making my heart

grow cold

I felt the dagger in me 

Author's Note

I know this isn't how I usually write, but I wanted to try something different. Does it work?

Reviews

[quinfinn]

somehow, the repetition of the words "i felt the dagger" bring this whole sordid thing to life. the pain of being backstabbed is beautifully illustrated herein. i think you would do well to explore this style of writing more...relax your mind and write from the heart, it is your best venue.

[Tasha]

Thank you so much Quinfinn, that really means a lot.

[Kenneth The Poet]

The dagger is an excellent motif. You do it justice.

[Tasha]

Thanks Kenneth.

[Myenigma]

i like it, it does work

[Tasha]

Thanks

[Damien Davison]

I felt as though, when I read it, there was stabs in my mind, each line another stab. You nailed... Stabbed it. :P

[Tasha]

Haha thanks you :p

[rnuff]

Wow so deep and emotional as well as powerful. nicely expressed

[Tasha]

Thanks

[Adelia Alighieri]

It does, yes. Love the intensity of your thoughts, adds so much meaning to it. Great read!

[Tasha]

Thanks