Bite Me

This turned out a lot differently than I thought it would.

Bite me, as if it's your symbol of keeping me close
so I won't ever let go
bite me because you love me
hold me tight
'cause I won't ever release
from this hold you have on me
bite me with all those strong teeth you have
keep me under your lips
and hold on as tight as you can
because I want this bite to last forever...
so just bite me until I go insane!!

Reviews

[WhoIsAmelia?]

I don't know where you meant to go with this one, but I like the crazed vampire place you ended up. Resembles to me a sort of twisted romance where the girl is sort of obsessed and, if I may, slightly delusional (*cough cough bella swan*). Perfect poem for all the vampire lovers out there, and an awesome, freaky write too!

[Frieda P]

Sounds like you want to be possessed not loved...although 'keep me under your lips' was pretty damn hot! Nice one Tasha.

[Tasha]

Thank you Frieda.

[trainwreck]

This had a really unique feel. I enjoyed the ending a lot! Good job.

[Tasha]

Thanks

[Kiri Nells]

I like it. It's not too bad at all. Don't take the half-hearted review the wrong way, it is well done. I'm just a bit tired of the theme. (she says whilst writing her vampire-ish story) I'm not rating lower because of it, if you were wondering. It really is done in acceptable fashion.
I am a bit confused though, you entered this into the contest, Something Wicked This Way Comes, but it doesn't match the contest criteria. We were supposed to write a story or poem corresponding to the given picture and the statement "something wicked this way comes". This has nothing to do with picture and only under some interpretations would it have to do with the statement. Perhaps I'm missing something, maybe just misunderstand your poem, but I don't think it quite fits the contest.
98/100

[Poetic Beauty]

This is being open about a fetish of sorts. I like this poem and the way you describe wanting to be bit.

[Letemdangle]

Yummy passion!

[Dushyant Thadani]

This is really passionate love, and the title is very strong. Wonderful write. Very intense, very mature.

[Allie :)]

This is insanely, but cutely kinky...I'm not sure what thoughts you were thinking when you wrote this, but it's just enough insanity to kick a*s :) Great read...it really gets you thinking :)

[Judy Ponceby]

Intense write there :) flows well and very compelling

[KAREN]

Very nice, makes me think of vampires who are madly in love.

[Gone]

Ohhh!!! So crazed!! I enjoyed it. Perfect poem and the most creative