Once Upon A Nightmare

What happened to once upon a time?

Once upon a time

I remember when 

Everything was perfect,

When we got along

And when our  loved showed

Once upon a nightmare

I remember when you said

I wasn't good enough,

It was like you stabbed 

Me in the heart

And all my blood, sweat

And tears flooded the floor

Once upon a time,

I remember when

You told me you loved me,

Once upon a nightmare

That love flew out 

The window...

I wasn't important to you

Like I use to be

You found someone else

You left me crying

And heartbroken...

Aching for you,

A sudden rage to find you

And hurt you!

But now during this time,

There's someone else...

Who isn't a b***h like you

And now its you wanting 

To relive the past...

But it's too late.....

Hahaha... Looks like a nightmare for you!!

Author's Note

The ending is different than I expected. I hope you like it anyway.

Reviews

[Chris]

Hi Ta'Sha,

Everything is soooooooo intense - no shades of gray... WHITEST white, BLACKEST black. LOVE is just a YESSS!! and being hurt is sooooo WRONG!!! and its beyond belief that anyone could GASP!!! DISS-you... if you hurt its ok? to want to hurt another or to just 'bring-it'... and the plans of revenge are just sooooooooooo satisfying.

But damn, you still hurt when you get home, and at night your mind still can't quite wrap itself around the why's and the feelings that flow inside... just before you find yourself asleep. Lifes a pure Biatch... sometimes... isn't it?

[jimmy]

damn, talk about power! that is a very cool a*s poem! (sorry for the vulgarity but sometimes it's the only seemingly fitting way to express what's on my mind)

[marielondon]

Exceptional.

[DontBlink158]

This was great!! This happens a lot in life and im glad someone wrote about it how you did it!! This happened with a friend of mine. Great job!!!!!!!!

[Dustin Reichmuth]

A very intense piece! You seemed to have gone all out on this one and you can really feel it through your words. The choice to color different sections differently was a nice touch as well. A great piece of writing.

[Psychopath^-^]

Wow! That was great.
I really enjoyed reading this!
I loved how you go in and out of good and bad... If that make sense(:
Great Writeee.

[Sabrina Demartini]

loved it

[biggerthenu]

THATS WHATS LIFE'S ALL ABOUT LIVING THROUGH YOUR NIGHTMARES TO SEE A BETTER oNE KEEP ON WRITING NICE ONE!

[Judy Ponceby]

I love how the nightmare becomes intertwined with the memory, not just with the words but with the color of the text. Intense emotions as well. Well done!

[VelvetRosetta]

Well well well, seems like I'm not alone...the sweet dreams versus nightmares.

Been there myself, and the end was....rubbing it in!!! Good one!