Dancing In The Moonlight

Everybody's dancing in the moonlight...

They took the long way home

On the night of their anniversary

To stop and smell the roses

In the middle of Central Park,

He takes her hand

And leads her into a dance

That's warm and full of love 

They don't need music

To dance in the moonlight

Because they stir music and desire

In each other 

As they sway to the beat within,

They look up in the sky to see

An orbit of memories 

Encircling them as they dance

The moon shines bright

As they look into each other's eyes

She smiles at him and says 

"I love you,"

He smiles with pride

And continues to dance

Because he had a surprise for her;

He reaches into his pocket

And pulls out a box, 

Could it be what she thinks it is?

He kneels down before her and asks

"Will you marry me?"

She says yes,

And they hugged,

And kissed

While dancing the night away in the moonlight

Author's Note

First attempt at creating a story within a poem. Please be nice.

Reviews

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Story created- a love story. At first I thought those two were an old married couple, still in love, but when I read the marriage proposal part I could envision their love lasting that long. All the details come alive, and really paint a picture. This poem touches the heart.

[biggerthenu]

THAT WAS GOOD KEPT ME GLUED TO THE PAPER ITS A BEAUTIFUL FIRST WRITE NICE ENDING

[Chris]

Ta'Sha,

You succeeded...

A 'Happy Ending' kind.

Take care,
Chris

[Daniel Sterling]

I thought it was really good, choice of words was also good, very descriptive like a story should be, yet with the flow of a poem. Keep on writing

[Just Cat]

I love this story within a poem idea. The theme is beautiful, setting is beautiful and whole piece is a pleasure to read.
I think your first attempt at creating a story within a poem was very sucessful!
A heart warming poem/story :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Very mature, and vivid even. The story encapsulated here is complete and universal.

[Jeremy Baker]

A lovely sentiment - and a first rate narrative poem. Good job!

[The fallen of innocence]

so romantic, i fell in love the moment i read it. good job ^^

[Fontane Wong]

Sweet and romantic poem. This poem eventually becomes a story, a powerful love story. The image of dancing under the moonlight is flowing in my mind, it's sooooooo sweet!

[FallenWingz]

awww that is so romantic the way he proposed..for an first attempt u did good.