Everything Doesn't Always Work According To Your Schedule

The title says it all.

Everything doesn't always work

According to your schedule,

You see I have things  to do

And they don't involve 

Talking to you..

I have my own agenda

My own meetings to attend,

None that involve ever

Seeing you again

Because you said what

You had to say

And I listened,

But now its my turn

To talk...

I'm done with you,

You can find someone else

That will wait on you 

Hand and foot,

You see...

I have my own schedule 

And you're not included

Reviews

[Chris]

Ta'Sha,

Comment: Problem is BOTH end in the same place - an empty circular-file with endless echoes of self...takes multiple I's to make a We... but no We survives a being thats only I.

Review: Read aloud - the 'Dance' stumbles and the anger that gives it the BITE and honesty fades. The content is valid. The emotion is present... and people WILL hear the thoughts you express...

Take care,
Chris

[R J Askew]

Marvellous stuff. I love it. The title drew me to read because it is angry. Of course th ebest insult is always ig-nor-an-ce, silence. But if we have to have a pop at someone this is a great one. I'd hate to be on the receiving end of it.

[Becky C Strukamp]

Love the weave of this poem and its structure. Good thought process from start to finish. You penned it well.

[Blessed_Angel]

wow this shows so much emotion in it. I loved it good read...

~BA

[James Snaith]

It’s raw and well-constructed, but there is an edit or two I would make (to make it read easier);

“You see I have stuff to do” I would suggest changing to “You see I have things to do”

The rest reads well, although I’m troubled by the ending. It lacks proper closure, and feels more like a kick in the teeth rather than rising above it. Humm, perhaps the following change would work;

“You see...
Everything works according
To my schedule”

To -

“You see…
I have my own
Schedule”

Or –

“Good luck
Finding someone willing to work according
To your schedule”

Hope all of that helps ;)

[sarah]

This is a good attitude to have sometimes when u are with someone who expects you to cater to their ever need, someone you makes u miss things for them but they never miss a thing for you. Great great write I can relate!

[TheElfPrincess]

A very good poem, it is very relatable. Well done.

[Krystal Nicole]

Beautifully written!! Very well penned. . Great job

[rose with love]

you said it all with this! well done

[compositionc]

Very cool. You mad at someone, home dawg? I'm sorry. I think lots of people could agree with what you say.