Packaged Away

Pushed aside and not being able to express yourself.

Packed together closely,

No room to breathe

No way for me to become my own

Thrown in with the rest

Together we are packed away,

With no room left to let

Our personalities shine through

Squeezed together to get as much

In as we can

Packed away with no sense of

Identity,

No purpose,

Stacked in a storage closet

Locked away from the world

Author's Note

Thanks so much if you review.

Reviews

[Christina May Shanaberg]

So often, it seems that we are packed away in a closet or lost in throgs of people. Suddenly, sometimes, a word, gesture, or a smile will come back to greet us; then, we know that we are very much alive. I loved your poem and I loved your thoughts. You are not "locked away from the world," because you are very much a part of it, adding all that you can to the beauty of it. This was a very well written and clearly understandable piece of writing; well executed and strong!

[EMF]

Deep and fascinating. You have encompased so many ideas and themes into such a short physical place. Terrific

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This just hits the heart, I really enjoyed this write.
Such a wonderful write, I can feel the emotions.

[MS. BABy]

awesome sense of what some may want us to be.....

[Marie Harrison]

Very mysterious poem to me.
Well great pressure over time
creates a diamond. Perhaps this
will happen in your case.
Oh, I forgot you're already a diamond
Ta'Shandra. Lovely poem!

[Emily Shae]

Hits a cord. A very good read!

[Raven Starhawk]

Tremendously sacred in my opinion. A beautiful read.

[amdc101]

I feel the line "Packed in a storage closet" locks the dramatic effect the rest of this poem has. I would say something more like "suffocating in a dark room". Just my opinion. However, the idea behind this poem is wonderful. Keep revising, there is always room for improvement. This is a poem that deserves to be the best it can be.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Feelings that most people feel at one time or another, great write :)

[dreaming dame]

Love this. Too true, for me.
Great write! :)