A Moment

 

 

 

My heart aches

For a moment

 

A moment 

A mere flicker

In this vastness

Of endless time

 

A moment

To know you

To touch you

To feel you

 

A moment

To see the twinkle

Of love in your eyes

When you look at me

 

A moment

To feel the softness

Of your lips

Pressed gently against mine

 

A moment

To hear your heart

Softly beating love's melody

As it intertwines with my own

 

A moment

To spend a sprinkle

Of eternity

In your arms

 

A moment

When everything

That ever existed

Finally makes sense

 

A moment

When passing stardust

Erases all time

Past, present and future

 

A moment

When the only thing left

And the only thing

That ever truly mattered

 

Was this moment

 

Reviews

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

this was amazing!! it was romantic and heart warming at the same time!!! things can change in just one moment, or you can be filled with more passion than imaginable. This was just so touching...

A moment
When the only thing left
And the only thing
That ever truly mattered

Was this moment

that was when i felt like i was in the moment the most...it started good and ended great!!!!

keep writing!!

~may

[Robert Luna]

I think as a whole we as people all linger and search for such an unending love. But at the same time fear being open to it as well. But love has it way of enduring in these times as long as it is meant to be. Forever never seems long enough when you find that kind of love though.


Great Job!!!!!!

[Enigma]

Wow!! This was great!! It made me get lost in the vastness of eternity and at the same time showed me the beauty of a single moment.
Very well - written. I enjoyed reading this. So beautiful, so romantic....^_^
Great Write!!

[Toni Prehoda Kahler]

I especially liked the repetition of "A moment" and then the short description of it. It was like blinking through each second of an embrace, stretching it forward in thought, and then zeroing right back in to the final second "And the only thing/that ever truly mattered/Was this moment". That was a magical journey!

[Caitlin Nicole]

I love this. Very well written. I love the reoccurrence of "a moment." It had a great effect. The ending was fantastic =] Great job!

[Poetic Injustice]

The edit enhanced. Well done.

[Ralphy]

Dani, I love the way people respond to your writes. A moment spells out a utopia of life and you wave your magic wand and poof, its out for all to envision� it was quite a pleasant read�nice write Dani�..

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The dictionary describes a 'moment', in context with time, as an indefinitely short period of time. What it doesn't explain, is how you managed to encapsulate so much romantic imagery, in so few words.

Exquisite write!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee

[Brianna Brie]

A moment
When the only thing left
And the only thing
That ever truly mattered
Was this moment

Wow...I resented a mere moment until I read your ending. Great write!!!

[jen]

the delicious beauty of a moment can really resonate in our memories that can at times make us happy and others build a longing for what was... you captured that.. very nice