My Love

For the "2 sentence stories" contest.

My love, my love, what a bitter end Fate has woven for us.

Cruel she must be to force my hand into yours now lifeless.

Reviews

[My-two-lives]

This is amazingly detailed, and creates great imagery in the readers mind; the use of an older style of speaking highlights what the character is saying, and it has a good rhythm to it (though I’m not sure if it's there on purpose). Good luck in the contest, and, despite that I also entered the contest, I hope that you are one of the winners rather than me, since this is a beautiful little two sentence story.

[Nathanial Tirado]

Very Othello feeling. I like it