I'm fine

Hiding your feelings......

She says she's fine

but inside she is dying

deep down her heart is hurt.

When she's with you she looks fine

but when she's alone she's fragile.

She is full of dreams

she wants to travel

to meet other people

to enjoy in life

to kiss under full moon.

Maybe one day she will be happy 

ready to move on

and she will say "I'm fine"

and it wouldn't be a lie.

Reviews

[Talesha]

You've never meet me Daniel,yet you were able to express every single thought,sentiment and dream of mine.That says a lot about your talent as a writer.I love this poem,easy to connect to and full of emotion and even a hint of home.Thank You for sharing. :)

[Danny]

Thank you for that kind review! :)

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for sharing...:)....................

[Danny]

Thank you! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..................

[s y e]

I liked this, I kind of changed it a tad tough but it is just a suggestion to make it flow easier....

~~~

She says she's fine,
but inside she is dying -
deep down her heart is hurting.
When she's with you, she looks fine
but when she's alone, she's fragile.

She is full of dreams;
Wanting to travel
and meet other people;
to enjoy life;
to be kissed under the full moon.

Maybe one day she will be happy
and ready to move on;
She will say be able to say "I'm fine"
and it wouldn't be a lie.

~~~

Just an Idea, I never changed much as you'll see, mainly punctuation but I'm not an expert, aha.

[Danny]

Thank you for a suggestion, I'll keep that in mind with future writing. I'm a beginner at writing poetry so I wasn't paying much attention to that.
:)

[Ahena MK]

good !!!!!! nicely penned
ahena :)

[Danny]

Thank you! :)

[Praveeta]

A lovely poem. Thanks for sharing.

[Danny]

Thank you! :)

[Praveeta]

You are welcome.

[Kimmie]

It should be "hurt" not "hurted"

This is great. So relatable.

[Danny]

I have corrected it.Thanks!

And thank you for review! :)