The Eye of Your Storm

I notice you in the distance.

A crowded room of you and I.

Worlds between our vessels.

A glimpse of artistry I spy.

The calm before the storm.

How I've waited for this chance.

You turn to me with delicacy.

I am gifted with a glance.

Our sight has locked us with no key in sight.

I tremble upon such grace.

Your look of confident wisdom.

Has left me in deep space.

Unable to breathe, I suffocate.

My lungs fill with empty air.

I struggle to remain myself.

With your prodigious stare.

The words I mean to speak have disappeared.

The flame has engulfed my chest.

I am left with only one breath.

I shall leave out all the rest.

On this day I have become something more.

This fire has left me warm.

From calm to hot, I know I was caught.

In the eye of your storm.

 

  

Reviews

[V]

I love it. Your words are wonderful and delicate. A real pleasure to read. Though I have come across some lines that read a bit off regarding rhythm. Your last two lines, matching the title, read lovely. The imagery you create is powerful. All in all, a well-written and entertaining piece of poetry.

[J. Hampton]

if ever i have felt like a vouyer that couldnt look away.
like a secret sapshot of a stolen moment
i soooo love this

[Danny Coykendall]

Thank you!

[Amaranta]

Great! I like your metaphors

[Danny Coykendall]

Thank you!

[Sarah Wilson]

I love it. It's a very romantic poem. I like the analogy of the fire, but I do feel like the second to last section was a bit off in rhythm to the rest of the poem.