The Man Who Never Lied

I was the man who never told a lie

But when I said I was alright...

Well that was my first time 

You may wonder why

It was because I didn't want to say bye

But I guess that was unavoidable 

Yes I had never told you a lie

But I found it wasn't on you I could rely 

Part of me is sorry

But I'm not alright 

Since you changed that in a fortnight 

And now it's too late

Maybe things would be different if I'd told the truth 

Maybe we could have reached a truce...

I just don't know... 

Reviews

[iveltac]

nice and makes me wanna laugh evily. :p jk . keep up the good work.

Love your NAtional Reviewer :pppp.
what is wrong with me. lol

[Leslie Philibert]

This is a good form, the line length is unusual for a rhymed poem, and the rhymes seem to be irregular, but as a poem it works well, which is the main thing.

[Dannyisawriter]

I like to switch things up and try things different styles from the norm ;)

[Matching Socks]

Sometimes pride gets in the way of the truth. Especially where there's love.
Really like this honest poem of yours. Well done.

[Dannyisawriter]

Thanks for the review :)

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome

[DoormanDan]

It's easy to not lie when things are simple in life, but when things get complicated(such as relationships, family affairs, etc) THEN it gets hard to stay 100% truthful. This poem explained that concept perfectly, and is definitely a brilliantly written piece!

[Dannyisawriter]

Thanks, I'm glad it worked for you :)

[MomzillaNC]

I don't know if we can never lie. But, the lie always cuts deep.

NOTES: I'd think about shortening the longer lines or breaking them into two lines.

[Dannyisawriter]

It didn't literally mean he NEVER lied in his life. It was just supposed to show that he was more honest with the girl than anybody else until everything fell apart

[MomzillaNC]

Maybe say he was the man who tried never to tell a lie.

[NoelHC]

A good write, an a subject most can relate to well, I think.
I was a little bothered by the differences in length of the lines, but that was mostly because of the appearance.

[Riley Justine]

This is a really well written poem, I have one suggestion: in the 5th line I would personally use goodbye, it sounds fine either why, just a personal preference. I really liked this one though!

[Skai Rain]

This is a great poem. I think it is impossible to never lie. I hope everything works out for you!