In the Darkness of the Forest

He slinks away

In the darkness of the forest

Swiftly, he moves

Never uttering a word

Blending in with the lost souls

Silently he drifts

among the children

 poisoning their mind with fear

Only to capture them

In the darkness of the forest

Author's Note

the poems a bit rough, i'm new at this, but please give me your honest opinion of how to clean up my work

Reviews

[DearSweetAgony]

Actually I prefer the roughness of this poem.
It makes it more...real.
I ADORE the beautiful darkness of this write.
(Like Always) Flawless Job!

[Miss Sally Sunshine]

I actually like it the way it is. It's rough, dark, and interesting. You used a lot of great imagery. Either there's a hiden meaning in your poem, or you just wrote whatever you came mind. Anyway, great poem, and I can't wait to read more of your poems :)

[Evan Kleve]

SM. S. M.

But lovely poem Dari. Lovely poem indeed. I'm so proud of you! *sniffle sniffle*